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SGA - How to lose me from reading your story in less than 30 seconds ...
Have Teyla address John as "Sheppard" and Rodney as "McKay" right there on the first page and I'm *out*. That's simply not her voice. It's either "John" or "Major/Colonel Sheppard" and "Rodney" or "Dr. McKay" - depending if she's talking to them in person or referring to them when talking to a third party.
And if an author doesn't manage to make her sound right on *this* small thing - when this is what you can hear/learn by simply watching the episodes and paying attention to how she speaks - then I really don't trust this author with the rest of the characterization, being it Teyla's or anybody else's. (And *this* is the minimum of what a beta-reader should actually catch. It's not only about typos, really, really not.)
It's perfectly possible that I'm misjudging the story based on this alone, but when I find this kind of flaw right at the start I just assume that the rest of the story also suffers from more flaws in characterization.
It's too bad, it was a long story and I actually looked forward to try it but after having stumbled over this right in the first minute of reading - just no.
And if an author doesn't manage to make her sound right on *this* small thing - when this is what you can hear/learn by simply watching the episodes and paying attention to how she speaks - then I really don't trust this author with the rest of the characterization, being it Teyla's or anybody else's. (And *this* is the minimum of what a beta-reader should actually catch. It's not only about typos, really, really not.)
It's perfectly possible that I'm misjudging the story based on this alone, but when I find this kind of flaw right at the start I just assume that the rest of the story also suffers from more flaws in characterization.
It's too bad, it was a long story and I actually looked forward to try it but after having stumbled over this right in the first minute of reading - just no.