As I've threatened ten days ago...

...I'm in need of another poor soul for correcting 525 words of mangled English.

Since poor Aly is still "under contract" for the last one and currently waiting for the axe, "masterpiece", second shoe, axe to drop on her in form of an overhauled version - God bless her for her patience - I don't want to burden her with a second one at the same time and therefore I'm out of victims candidates.

Again, I've tried to translate a short scene and need someone to correct grammar, vocabulary and tenses, basically polish it enough so it doesn't read too much like Babel Fish.

And boy, I *did* have a laugh when I put the text through the "real" Babel Fish just for fun. *G*

So, any volunteers?

Oh, hm, I wonder what's that cloud of dust on the horizon ...